Morgan Fratto
Writings
January 12, 2106: Forms of Media I used Yesterday
Texting: used for talking to the audience, my bestfriend and my mom, directly; the tone for this would be more personalized because I was talking to specifically my mother and my bestfriend
Snapchat: used for talking to my friends by using pictures and some text; the audience was a group of my friends that included Alyssa, Brian, and Johnathan; visual and textual mode
Instagram: used for sharing a picture of myself to show to my friends; the audience was anyone who saw the post of my picture on their news feed; the word choices that I made while using this form of digital media seems more “me”
For this Media Post: Facebook and Instagram
I chose to use Facebook and Instagram for this particular post. In using Facebook, the picture and the word choices and tone of the caption will be viewed by a different type of audience. The caption in particular needs to be more positive because more of my family members are going to be viewing this post, and they do not take it well when I post anything that could be viewed as me being sad, upset, or depressed. This caption reads, "I'm missing the beach entirely too much. Thankfully I'm going home this weekend! I need a relaxing period. <3".
When using Instagram for this post, I did not need to worry as much about the word choices or the tone of the caption of the picture because most of the people in this audience is consisted of my friends, rather than both my friends and my family. This caption reads, "I'm missing my safe haven #beach #keeppushingforward #justsmilethroughit".
I altered the picture for both platforms by applying a filter that is available on Instagram, which made the picture have more of a blue tint and a brighter hue.
Ultimately, the only this that I seem to ever change when posting the same picture to Facebook and Instagram would be the caption because, to my family, I am a positive person with a positive attitude, when in real life, I try to mask what I am feeling if it is sad or upsetting with a positive outlook.
January 14, 2016: Review of Gianna’s Project One
The theme of this essay is based mostly on the anticipation of getting to the application and acceptance process FSU holds.
The genres the writer is analyzing are Twitter, her notebook writings, Post-It notes, a journal, and the actual application on FSU’s website.
The writer includes these different genres on the paper by including pictures of her notebook, individual tweets and her thoughts on them in different fonts, and through examples of the post-it notes she wrote. She used the post-it notes to motivate herself through her desire to get into Florida State University and to remind herself of important events and dates that she needs to remember.
Each genre the writer uses is contributing to my understanding of who the writer is. When she uses her post-it notes, it shows me that she tries to be organized, get her work done on time, and tries to stay motivated in order to get to her end goal. As each post-it note is made, she is giving herself a sort of pep talk to help her get through the work, which indicated dedication.
My favorite part of this essay is the fact that she made a realistic application site from FSU’s website. It helped me to be ‘in the moment” with her as she completed the actual application after waiting and getting through all of the deadlines.
With this paper, I would include an experience she had with someone while visiting Florida State University. She definitely talks a lot about how wonderful the people she interacted with, so reading about an actual experience that she had while interacting with someone, such as a tour guide.
January 26, 2016: Analyzing Artist Statements and Prepping for Peer Review
Artists Statements
In the two pieces, the artists are trying to explain to the audience about how they used different types of social networking or media to help further tell the story in their respective papers. One author is describing to the audience about how they used different forms of media to help explain about something they are interested in; comparatively, the second author is trying to help describe a story about her ex.
The first author talks about the purpose of the piece they have written in order to “discuss the decisions and choices he or she made in composing a specific text or other work” (Braziller and Kleinfeld 232). The design of this statement also seems to “offer structure and organization” (Braziller and Kleinfeld 236). The second author used different modes of media that were more difficult to put together. I believe that by adding the disclaimer is used to prove further to the audience that it is fiction and she “chooses words related to their subject” in her statement (Braziller and Kleinfeld 236). This author also seemed to “establish ethos through the reasoning they present in their Author’s statement” (Braziller and Kleinfeld 233).
Prepping for Peer Review
1. My favorite part of the essay was in the paragraph about Beethoven and Classical music because she spoke to an audience of “quiet girls” and said that they can be powerful and achieve their dreams just as Classical music made her feel.
2. I believe that Martha chose to start and end the paper the way she did because she wanted to put a focus on how music had changed her life out of a boring state. The tone that she set at the beginning of the paper was a little dreary, but by the end of the first paragraph, it seemed like the paper was going to be more positive, just like the ending of the paper with the “top of the walls aligned with colorful records” (Martha 3)
3. I believe that Martha used and appropriate amount of detail in communicating her vision. I truly felt as if I was standing in her room looking at the bare walls in the beginning of the paper and then looking at the colorful walls at the end.
4. Martha seems to reinforce the main points of her papers through her writing style by using appropriate word choices. The sentences seem to flow in a way that the “big” words do not seem strained in order to prove the audience of her vocabulary.
5. Based on this excerpt, I believe that Martha should have added pictures of the room as to make the form of the essay more personal to closely match up with the personal feeling you get when reading this paper.
February 2, 2016: Avoiding Plagairism: Summarize, Paraphrase, Quote
*To see my article analysis on the Fear of Missing Out, click on the picture to the left.*
This assignment shows the different uses of citing an article: paraphrasing, summarizing, and using direct quotes. I chose to do the article "FOMO Addiction: Fear Of Missing Out" because I wanted to know about the "FOMO Addiction" and how it pertains to our society today.
February 4, 2016: #LiveTweetingTrevorNoah
February 9, 2016: Solidifying Paper Topics
Celebrities in advertisement was the topic the group I was in chose. I feel that celebrities in commercials, such as Adam Levine in a ProActive commercial, appear to be affective in communicating to people who suffer from acne that the treatment they are offering will work and clear the acne. The individual I am using to enter the conversation is Adam Levine, who would contributed to the conversation because of the numerous appearances he has made in ProActive commercials. The audience would be all adolescences or people who suffer from acne. The research questions would be “What impact do celebrities make on a commercial?” and “Are the results the commercials provide real results?”. The purpose of the project would be to show the reader the impact a celebrity makes on a commercial, if any at all, and the influences they make upon the whether or not the viewer may want to purchase the product. The platform that I could write this paper for could be Buzzfeed because it would be conversational, informative toward the same type of young audience, and the message would be the right amount of time to insure the attention of the viewer is kept. The kinds of sources that I might use could include articles on how ProActive worked for different people, or how it did not work, and experiences that people had when viewing the commercial to see what made them want to try the product. I could also include different statements made by Adam Levine in order to show my audience his side of how the product works and if he truly believes this product could produce accurate results among most of the people who try the product.
February 16, 2016: Introduction on Annotative Bibliography
*The picture to the left also has a document of my practice on annotative bibliograohies.*
Bloom, Paul. “First Person Plural.” The Bedford Book of Genres: A Guide & Reader. Eds. Amy
Braziller and Elizabeth Kleinfield. Boston and New York: Bedford/St. Martin’s, 2014. 545-558. Print. The article talks about the idea of the “self”. At the beginning of the article, the author talks about the short-term self, and, comparatively, the author talks about the long-term self toward the end of the article. This expert wants to know what makes a person happy and the significance of “I” when people are developing their personalities as they go along in their lives. This source relates to my research topic because my topic is also dealing with disorders that people have; however, this article focuses on dissociative-identity disorder, whereas my paper will focus on dyslexia among students. I could possibly use this article to help compare the effects of dissociative-identity disorder with the effects of dyslexia among students. I could then further the changes students make as they come to the long term effect, just as the article does with leading into the long-term effects of recognizing one’s self and your personality. Tweet: You have to use your past self to develop your future self. You grow through your experiences and the development of your personality.
February 23, 2016: A Variety of Voices #foodforENCthought
My relationship with food:
My relationship with food is pretty basic. I am not involved in any diet, nor do I really need to be on any diet because my metabolism is so fast. I mostly eat things like cereal, turkey sandwiches, mac n cheese, strawberries, and apples because those are just some of the things that I enjoy eating. The same reason goes for why I love eating pizza and french fires… because it tastes good! I try to avoid food that are too greasy because I do no particularly like the sight of grease dripping off of my food. Food is very important to my daily lifestyle because without it, well, death may come! But in all actuality, I have to eat so much food and a certain amount of sugars to maintain my blood sugar level. I tend to eat more times a day, but in smaller portions as I eat when I am home.
Mariah's relationship with food:
I don’t have a particular diet or meal plan that I stick to. I do happen to eat a lot of grilled meats, which can range from salmon, chicken, or even shrimp. I can’t eat red meats though because I am practicing lent, and that was one of the things that I had given up. Foods that I avoid would be red meats of course, and anything that contains a huge amount of sugar. I use to be a major sugar junkie, so now I try to eat more vegetables and fruits in my diet. I eat them because I care for my health, not because I like them. As far as my diet here compared to home, it is about the same. I always have cooked for myself since my junior year of high school, and that’s only because my mom worked a lot. Being here is the same, I rely on myself for food.
February 25, 2016: Targetting an Aundience
I chose the articles “An Open Letter to Professional Athletes” and “How to Choose a Sport for Your Child (Ask Yourself These 4 Things First)”.
In the first article, the author seems to be using solely his opinion and no factual evidence to back it up. By simply using their own opinion, the author tells the reader what he thinks professional athletes should avoid in order to help maximize their time spent as a professional athlete. Throughout the second article, the author is also simply voicing his opinion. Giving your child a choice on what sport they would like to play is great, but sometimes the cost starts to come into play when the child is trying out his/her fourth sport. The author is using his opinion to voice to the audience that sometimes, the child need to pick the sport, but that it needs to be done wisely in order to not go through a trial and error period and waste money.
The overall tone of both of the articles seem to be casually explaining to the audience their opinions on that subject at hand. Facts are not thrown around, but simply the pure thought process and experience the authors of these articles have encountered. The entirety of both articles is conversational.
The article “How to Choose a Sport for Your Child (Ask Yourself These 4 Things)” seemed to interest me more because it was asking the parents about what sport they should put their child in without much regard for what the sport that the child actually wants to pursue.
March 15, 2016: Integrating Quotes with Symone
*Symone and I changed up a bit in this paragraph that we selected. What we changed is underlined.*
Depending on the stroke you have, ischemic or hemorrhagic, determines the type of treatment needed to recover from it. Stroke Treatments dictates that, “an ischemic stroke, one where there is an obstruction of the blood vessel, accounts for 87% of strokes in general (Stroke Treatments). The treatment used depends on how severe the blockage is. The most common treatment used for ischemic strokes is tissue plasminogen activator (tPA). TPA is the only FDA approved treatment for ischemic strokes and is given intravenously. “[T]PA works by dissolving the clot and improving blood flow to the part of the brain being deprived of blood flow…A significant number of stroke victims don’t get to the hospital in time for tPA treatment; this is why it’s so important to identify a stroke immediately” (Stroke Treatments). Another treatment option, which is strongly recommended and usually done after tPA is administered, is an endovascular procedure called mechanical thrombectomy. A mechanical thrombectomy is when doctors use a metal mesh called a stent to remove the clot. The stent is a wired–cage device that is attached to a catheter. Doctors softly send the stent up the artery to where the blockage is located. They then use the stent to trap the clot and pull it out, sometimes using suction.
March 22, 2016: Introduction to the Composition in Three Genres
The Truth about Fairy Tales
The purpose of this composition is to portray the idea that people identify themselves as different Disney princesses for different reasons, like being the prettiest friend. The author seems to believe that the idea of having a happily ever after is still with people as they leave childhood and enter adulthood.
I think that the author chose to work with this genre to show the audience that people identify with Disney princesses. The audience that the author seems to be trying to reach would be an older audience that may enjoy watching Disney movies because they say Fairy Tales can still propel adults back to their childhood” in the sense that people try to find happily ever after.
The tone of the audience seems like the author is simply telling the audience their opinion about how people may identify with Disney characters. I believe that this tone is appropriate for the purpose of this piece because it is supposed to be about their opinion and not about facts. There are not sources used, which seems appropriate because it is supposed to be opinions, not facts. This composition could be improved by using more “truths” instead of using too much personal accounts.
7 Layer Dip of Eternal Disappointment in Love
The purpose of this composition is to bring about a different view on how love is made. The author may have chosen to work with this genre to show how love corrupts the minds of young girls. The audience that the author may be trying to reach could be women who believe that they can one day find love and love Disney to maybe burst their bubble.
The tone of this piece seems cynical and informative. The tone seems appropriate for the purpose of this piece because the author is trying to tell the audience that this is what it takes to find love in the eyes of Disney and how women struggle to find love. There were no sources used.
March 24, 2016: Potential Genres Proposal
My ideas
Your original audience: a music video
Roommates: drawing/painting
Parents: scrapbook page
Elementary school students: short stories
Non-English speakers: collage
A panel of professors: business letters
Their ideas
Your original audience: musical performances
Roommates: user manual
Parents: musically inclined advertisement
Elementary school students: comic
Non-English speakers: photo essay
A panel of professors: researched arguments
An expansion on three of the ideas
I could do a music video for my original audience. This genre seems appropriate for my topic because my topic deals with music and how it makes you feel and impact your personality. I could take a well-known song and create a different music video for the song.
Another option could be making a picture collage of different people listening to different music that captures their emotions while listening to that music. An example of this would be taking a picture of my mom listening to a motivational song and standing in a Wonder Woman pose. This seems appropriate to show people from different cultures or people who speak different languages to connect to the pictures based on the emotion the person in the picture is trying to convey.
A third option could be making a short story to help a younger audience to realize that music does help to change or enhance your personality. This seems appropriate because, by using the short story, I could reach a broader audience to help show people that music helps people be more stable with their emotions.
March 29, 2016: Working with Websites
First World Problems
Purpose/Audience: The purpose of the site seems to be to help raise money to help provide HIV medication to those who can’t afford it. The audience could be people looking for gag gifts or people who want to donate money to people who are in need of HIV medication.
Background Color/Color Scheme: The background color seems appropriate along with the size of the words and fonts. I believe that having the white background with the black color for the words was a good decision because you can tell easily what everything says. Having each bottle be a different color with black print is a good idea as well because it is easy for you to see the words clearly.
Organization of Page: The page is well organized with everything in proper tabs. It also looks like an average shopping website where you can browse through different products for what you’d like to purchase.
Tone: The tone seems to be serious as well as in sort of a joking manner because of the labels of each of the products.
Sources: They use the people who they are trying to help in their organization on the bottom of the pages.
Lian O’Connell “2135 E-Portfolio”
Purpose/Audience: The author seems to be trying to help explain how adoption affects a person and the family ready to adopt. The audience could be people who were adopted or families who want to, or have, adopted.
Background Color/Color Scheme: I believe that the color scheme was simple, yet interesting. She used the same font throughout the entire website and didn’t use too many colors or fonts.
Organization of Page: I believe that this page is well organized. Everything seems to fit nicely in each tab. The information was useful as well on the “Project 3” tab.
Tone: The tone seems serious and heart-warming. She definitely put a lot of her own personal experiences in her projects.
Sources: The sources the author used were all clearly provided and displayed effectively.
March 31, 2016: Working on Wix
My Website Suggestions for Mariah
I would just make sure that everything is properly aligned in the text boxes that you have created on each page. The use of the text boxes really helps with being able to see the words clearly. Just make sure that everything is aligned properly and fully in those text boxes. For your project two tab, the text boxes seem a little light, but other than that, the color matches well with the background picture.
For the word colors, make sure that the words are able to be seen without struggle. Using white for the color of the words “Here is my rough rough draft…” on your project one tab makes it hard for the viewer to see exactly what you are saying.
Your organization is nicely done. Everything is in its proper tabs and there doesn’t seem to be any confusion about where something needs to be placed.
My Website Suggestions for Faith
I would add a little more color in there somewhere. The use of the white background is great with the black color for the words, but it looks a little plain. Your project one tab is set up nicely, with everything aligned properly. On your “In-Class Writing” page, I like how everything is all lined up; it looks very nice. I would definitely add in some color or pictures for color. I would try to make all the pictures you upload to the site to be your original pictures. It helps to put a more personal touch on the website.
In your project two tab, make sure that you put in a title! Other than that, this tab looks like you took the time to format it properly and make sure that everything is lined up.
Website Suggestions From Mariah
Great home page, love the music incorporated into it J It is very consistent and neat, but perhaps we could have a change in color and play with the box or even the fonts. A nice cool color that would sort of blend with the background. On the writings tab, I think you could possibly consider a different background because it gets a little distracting at the end half. Your project tabs are neatly organized into three different categories, great. Perhaps you could change the background relating to your project, so instead of a beach background throughout your page you could change it depending on the subject. Maybe next to a song on your outline page you could add pictures from your final draft. Besides those little things and filling out your other pages, I hope to see a little more visuals on your pages
Website Suggestions From Faith
Morgan
I love your about me section. It is very well put together and I like how your background relates with your quote and your picture. Instead of adding the more about me tab, add the pictures under what you have already. Also, with that in mind, maybe don’t add the link ENC2135 under writings, but instead just allow the viewer to click directly on the writing tab to view your writings. I think it would look more put together this way.
However, I really do like how you separated the projects into draft, outline, and final. It saves it from looking really jumbled which was a really good idea. Instead of directly the final draft to a word document, maybe consider formatting it so that the viewer can look at it directly on the site. I feel like it would be more effective that way
I don’t know if you realized, but just to make sure you don’t skip over it by accident, the February 9, solidifying paper topics is not linked through the picture* I honestly don’t think I have anymore critiques beside these. The website is really well formatted. You can tell that you’ve put a lot of effort into it.
April 14, 2016: Reflecting on ENC 2135
First Article:
Thesis: “Learning to write well – clearly, effectively, and quickly – should be an important component of every undergraduate education.”
Quote: “No matter how brilliant you are r how well you can code, if you can’t communicate your ideas, you’re not a good hire.”
My Analysis: I believe that this applies to me because I am a STEM major and I do not necessarily believe that I need to be writing a whole bunch. Although I do write well already, I do not think that those skills will be used in my everyday life after school.
Second Article:
Thesis: “Writing seems to be one of the skills requiring the most remedial training.”
Quote: “College students admit their poor writing proficiency, too.”
My Analysis: I believe that being able to write well is extremely important for a lot of jobs; however, for more remedial jobs, like food and retail, you are not really required to write up reports or essays